Wanna See


By Bruce Vancamp

A young woman, living in a totalitarian, all-female empire, decides to reject continuing her mother's ruling legacy and joins an underground rebellion aimed at taking down the regime once and for all.

Draft #2
Peer Rating: 80%
Industry Rating: N/A
Draft 2: 80%
Draft 1: 47%
1 Reviews | 118 pages | 3 weeks ago | Draft 2


A thoughtful adventure about the dichotomy between men and women. Think 1984 meets The Handmaid's Tale meets Star Wars.

Industry Reviews

Peer Reviews

The formatting and pacing is well done. There are a couple of details that can be easily fixed. For example, "spanish" is with a capital S. Watch for passive wording. "is wailing" needs to be "wails", "He starts crying" needs to be "He cries.", "is screaming," to "screams". There are minor spelling errors that can be easily taken care of, "Actiavting". Overall, I liked the story and pacing. It really drew me into your film. the mystery of the blu...

2 weeks ago |
mike harper Top Reviewer
LAVENDER Script Notes

-Very cool intro into your world.
-Lavender is mostly reactive besides the first glimpse we catch of her dancing. I’m not sure why she’s so queasy and jittery if her mother is in charge. You’d think she’d be used to it all by now...
-Page 9: I like how you introduce us to Krista, establish her friendship (or maybe more?) with Lavender and give us some exposition about what’s going on in this man-free world.
-Page 10:...

8 months ago |

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