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James Bond 007-Long Love Lost

short
By Erez Bailen
Action/Adventure,Mystery/Suspense,Drama

Bond has a wild adventure ahead of him with his arch nemesis Blofeld.

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Nominee
Draft #5
Nominee
Draft #4
Nominee
Draft #3
Peer Rating: 14%
Industry Rating: N/A
Draft 5: 14%
Draft 4: 37%
Draft 3: 29%
Draft 2: 36%
8 Reviews | 23 pages | 11 months ago | Draft 5

Summary

James Bond has a dream of his arch nemesis Blofeld, this dream might just be more real than he thinks. beginning of a 007 fan fiction screenplay, I need help getting ideas on how to continue it.

Industry Reviews

Peer Reviews

As someone who has not seen many Bond films, I may not be the best to judge the originality or evaluation of what was additive in the story - but will make an attempt to judge the story based solely on the information provided in the script.

Overall - I really enjoyed the concept of bending reality, Bond never truly being able to tell if he's lucid or not. It's something fresh that would be interesting to see played out on the big screen....

9 months ago | read more...
Where do I begin? I marked the concept as being fair, because using James Bond in an altered way (outside the normal formulatic Bond script) seems enticing. The problem is, I don't see it. Your formatting is OK, but the characters and dialogue are not good at this point. It's very hard to follow your story. As a writer, you see it in your head and try to transpose that to words on a page. Very few lines you've written to this point, would b...

9 months ago | read more...
Drew Michaels Top Reviewer
The Bond character that everyone knows and loves seems to have been lost in translation with your rendition of the character. A lot of his dialogue doesnt scream 'Bond' to me, the excessive swearing can be toned down significantly, plus the scene with the clown is very unnecessary, do we care if Bond likes clowns or not?
The concept of Blofeld having a mind control machine is interesting, but the structure it is told in is very confusing and ver...

9 months ago | read more...
As stated, this is not even a poor effort. It is aware of the Bond franchise, characters, noted scenes, and it's own genre.

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Comments on issues in script:
The "Machine": Brain washing or Thought and voice control?

If the MAN character is actually BLOFELD at the start. Write Blofeld.

Character cannot go from one name to the...

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Reid Barwick Top Reviewer
James Bond in Long Lost Love – Review – 3 August 2020

Overall, this seems more of a Bond parody along the lines of a low budget and low talent Austin Powers movie. The writing seems over dramatic which is overshadowed by poor punctuation, lack of character introductions, and overall confusion in logic.

This script, if produced might have a small cult following along the lines of films such as, “Cave Women on Mars” or “Lair of the White Wor...

9 months ago | read more...
I just want to say that I mean no harm, no offence. This is just my professional p.o.v.
Nothing else.

I had a terrible time reading this. There is no right formatting. Grammar is horrible.
The usual rules on screenwriting are pretty much ignored.
Punctuation is terrible. Periods and commas are somehow all over the place or just plain ignored.
A lot of the dialogue makes no sense and many scenes are full of contradiction.
Character develop...

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Meik V. Fischer Top Reviewer
First of all, I believe this story has an interesting concept that would be better exploited if it wouldn't be spend too much time explaining things to the audience. I think it would make for a very tense short if it had had more focus and had taken place in a more specific situation rather than in many different moments. I think that exposition is one of this script's main issues. I know it seems necessary to set up everything and remind the aud...

9 months ago | read more...
A rather lazy, uninspired bit of fan fiction with no real grounding, character development of discernible theme, this short film script might have saved itself a bit if more attention had been paid to not only proper script formatting, but basic grammar in general. I found myself wondering whether this slapdash affair was meant to be some sort of parody or if it was simply a rushed attempt at creating a curtain-call scenario so as to integrate a...

8 months ago | read more...
I don't have much knowledge on James Bond. That being said, here were my thoughts:

1. Concept - I personally did like the concept since it's one of those "dead" archenemies coming back for revenge type of stories.

2. Story - The story was decent. I liked that Blofeld was trying to use Bond for his machine as a part of his evil plan.

3. Structure - The structure was honestly hard to follow along with since not many details are given for p...

9 months ago | read more...
Cyle Brooks Top Reviewer
There is too much of the historic Bond cinematic references which we already are aware. There is an assumption that the view already knows Bond' character. Dialog is more America than a cheeky stylized British understatement to make a point. There is no real character development, and too many characters and issues are introduced to really want to understand what the author is trying to accomplish in this short stew of classic characters and dis...

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Reid Barwick Top Reviewer
I enjoyed so much reading story about James Bond, not only because I am fain of James Bond but also because this story is written with great sense of humour and very on spot.
In my opinion author feeling James Bond story :) Idea of the story is really interesting, now are questions is it James Bond death or is he in coma and the his subconscious mind fighting with Blofeld. Also what will happen to James after he will awake? Will he be same perso...

9 months ago | read more...
Story title removed) is a great story. I’m particularly impressed with your pacing, which is the most important aspect of creating suspense in a script. You have the innate ability to utilize the ‘slow reveal’ in your writing, which is a trait that is hard to teach and difficult to master. Instead of giving your audience all the facts from the outset, you take your time letting them rise to surface organically.

However, I have a few suggest...

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I'll start out by saying that I have not seen any of the James Bond films myself so anything to do with character, dialogue or story will not be apart of this review. However, I would be interested in how you see this project long term. Is this a short film to be shown at a festival? A series of short films? Is this a new feature film and you just haven't written the rest yet? Or are you just writing this for fun? But overall, things to note are...

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By choosing to write a script whose main character is James Bond, you’ve set a very high bar, and usually, only the most seasoned writers tackle this momentous task. Unfortunately, you fell short of that bar.
Here are the areas where I judged your script:
1. Does your script set the scene/time-period? Yes and no. We know it’s the interior of MI-6 (wherever that is: from other Bond movies, MI-6 is in London; however, if you’re the one person who...

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D Ray Van Top Reviewer
I'll get right into it. I know asking for reviews on your first couple pages may be exciting; you want to know if the concept is good enough to keep going, but at least make sure your formatting and grammar are great before requesting. I suggest you go back and edit all of your typos before requesting another review. Your descriptions often run into each other like run-on sentences. Your use of multiple question and exclamation marks is very amat...

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Claire B Top Reviewer
This is James Bond so we all know the story and I like the new plot of the mind altering power and return of an old foe he thought he had killed. The clown part is kind of funny and I like that beginning. Your formatting is good and you obviously know most of the rules. I would change the cardboard cut out of Bond to something more scientific in feel and maybe something that comes out his watch? An AI? Just a thought. I think you have the feel fo...

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WL Wright Top Reviewer
To be honest bro, writing a script based on James Bond probably won't get you anywhere as a screenwriter in Hollywood (if that's what you are aiming for). Agents, Managers and Producers are all looking for original work and James Bond has been around since my grandmother was a kid. No one is going to take a James Bond script seriously from a spec writer, just bare that in mind.
Having said that, the story you told of James Bond isn't very origi...

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Kwesi Lewis Top Reviewer
This is technically not a short screenplay but a small part of a full feature film. And I doubt developing this into a feature script will be worth your time, as this starting part is not very perfect for a feature film since everything happens is just like that, we come to know that BLOFELD is alive and BOND is sent to kill him just like that, which feels very artificial (The dialogues between M and BOND are not very good).
The twist of disco...

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An enemy from the past is not a new concept but is something that can be improved upon. This has been used across multiple TV series and Movies, although not sure it has been used in a James Bond film. This story could definately stand on its own if further developed past the first six pages of the screenplay. As a James Bond fan I wasn instantly intrigued and wanted to read more. The teaser event in the beginning showed me cataclysmic event that...

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Troy Pilewski Top Reviewer
What is this about? I don't get it. Is this really a short story or an attempt at opening a future Bond feature? I only ask myself that question because a song by Melissa Fine is written in as an opening credit song on p4, which is one page before the script ends; that's strange for a short story. Also, the song is seems too upbeat for a Bond flick to me, although, I'm not really an expert on Bond theme tunes to have an opinion on that. Then I as...

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Damian R Top Reviewer
The content of the story was well-rounded. Yet, there were moments that it was difficult to envision what was truly happening. Due to the lack of action lines throughout the script. Reading over a page of just dialogue left me wondering where can things be shown rather than explained to me. I have no concept of how distressed or relaxed Bond is. The screenplay relied heavily on dialogue being its passage to success. Although this may work well fo...

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