Within a medieval English castle awaits an old festival celebrating the shortest day.
SummaryPicture an old-time English midwinter celebration.
Concept is not strong enough.
The first ten pages did not draw me in. It wasn't interesting at all.
I can't tell how well scenes are written since its all dancing and singing and I don't know how the singing goes.
If there is a protagonist, I don't see it.
The protagonist has no clear goal. If there is one, I don't see it.
There is no conflict and the climax just didn't make up.