A pregnant woman in is giving birth and her husband in hot pursuit to the hospital.
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Family | 1 Reviews | 4 pages | 8 months ago | Draft 3
This is the intro scene to a film, about the importance of family over work. I made some changes to the dialogue and grammar.
So the first page of the script is okay. Since it's a very short script. Or rather the beginning of a longer script. So far, the plot is okay. Dialogue is good. Our character, I mean the guy, is interesting enough. I would certainly want to know what happens next. And the emotion there is simply... good. I felt the need for the guy to be by his wife. The scenes are written well. The pacing is okay. If there is a climax here, I can't see it.
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