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Blind Ambition

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A pregnant woman in is giving birth and her husband in hot pursuit to the hospital.

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Family | 2 Reviews | 4 pages | 4 months ago | Draft 3

Summary

This is the intro scene to a film, about the importance of family over work

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First, the concept was good but the execution was not done that well (does not mean you don't write well). I didn't get the sense of the title (Blind Ambition) from what I just read. I mean, he was actually at a class when the contractions of Rebecca started. He was kinda at a place he was meant to be. So, it wasn't convincing that he was more work-focused which resulted in missing an important family moment. In short, the stakes were never high...

4 months ago | read more...
Olusola Oladesu Top Reviewer
The story was pretty bland in what it delivered. It's an everyday situation (which isn't a bad thing) but happened in a very regular way. I don't get what the title had to do with the story.

I'm actually confused about who Jennifer was in the story -- I get that she hands Timothy the note about his child being born, but where did she get the information from and why did she get it instead of him? Did she get a text -- why wouldn't he have got...

4 months ago | read more...

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