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When The Bell Jangles


A woman running away from an abusive relationship holds a secret but so does the hotel she finds herself in.

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Thriller | 1 Reviews | 10 pages | 7 months ago | Draft 1


My story is an Alfred Hitchcock inspired thriller called 'When the bell jangles" about a young woman named 'Jane' who is running away from an abusive relationship when she finds herself at a secluded hotel for the night in which she discovers a dead body. In her desperate attempt to remain under the radar she covers it up on a series of actions which complicate her situation. what is she hiding? Is the killer still lurking around? The story tackles the subject of domestic abuse and how far an individual will go to escape it. Voyeuristic techniques seen in many of Hitchcock's films are used add to the suspense of the story and for the audience to question the characters motives.


Jane's motivation to leave her abusive husband is clear, but why she pretends to work at the hotel and cover up a murdered young woman is not. Right there, in the story, you have a problem because her decision to stay and hide the body isn't believable. She's supposed to be on the run at this point, why is she staying? Mr. Harrington doesn't add anything to the story and is a little out of place, his appearance causes the pace to suffer. Why does...

5 months ago |

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