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Lily

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A young woman finds out that the biological father she's never known is terminally ill. One of his final requests is to see her before he passes.

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Drama | 2 Reviews | 11 pages | 5 months ago | Draft 3

Summary

A touching short about a father and daughter relationship that only gets a chance to blossom towards the end of the father's life.

Reviews

This is a warm story about forgiveness. I enjoyed the use of flashbacks and with some good direction, it could be done creatively to enhance the cinematic experience.

The characters seem genuine. Particularly Lily who is understandably “not about” seeing her bio-dad. My issues come with Tim as he feels very flat. His reasoning for not being in her life comes off as one giant excuse. I don’t know how she isn’t able to see this Sorry I was an a...

4 months ago | read more...
UDJASON Top Reviewer
Concept is good. Dialogue is good. Pacing is good but could be better. The story certainly drew me in from the beginning. Our character is interesting. Then the flashback scenes are good but could be better. Especially the way they were written not the content. The climax was a little disappointing to me because I think Lily forgave so fast.
In all, the script does read well.
Great job Benny.

3 months ago | read more...

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