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Coach Murphy

TV Series

A football experienced woman goes on a journey of self discovery and destiny when as a publicity stunt she becomes the first Female head coach in the NFL, but when she proves to be the better person for the job the Male dominated league pushes back.

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Comedy | 2 Reviews | 34 pages | 9 months ago | Draft 2


In this politically and socially relevant Dramedy Christine Murphy, a former football star in High School but was never had the chance to play in College, takes this publicity stunt and uses it to prove she has what it takes to turn the team around and that she can be just as competent and capable as a man. Coaching a losing team of has-been’s and misfits to a championship maybe easier than navigating all the of the social politics, misogyny and racial equality protests. With women standing up in politics, entertainment and everyday life to the culture of sexual harassment and gender bias, and the MeToo movement that is taking down powerful men this Coach Murphy will be a showcase for the changes that are taking place post-2016. Christine is challenging the male-dominated and beleaguered NFL to take her seriously as a person and respect her ability.


The idea of the writer is very clear, and the dialog in this screenplay shows that this writer knows quite a lot about the game. As a Dutch person I don't. I believe the success of this script falls or stands based on your knowledge of the game. I was a little lost as to the humor part of the script, because I didn't really think it was funny.

The dialogue has been well written, but I do feel it could be a bit more show and a little less tell....

9 months ago |
I think its a great concept. I would watch the show. I think some of the dialogue is a little too long and wordy. Usually, when it comes to comedy it works better in shorter dialogue. The introductions dialogue seems rushed and unnatural. If this is supposed to be a T.V. series then it should be more action than dialogue. It seems you are telling most of the story through dialogue.

For example, Your montage with the newspaper clip needs to...

7 months ago |

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