A football experienced woman goes on a journey of self discovery and destiny when as a publicity stunt she becomes the first Female head coach in the NFL, but when she proves to be the better person for the job the Male dominated league pushes back.
The idea of the writer is very clear, and the dialog in this screenplay shows that this writer knows quite a lot about the game. As a Dutch person I don't. I believe the success of this script falls or stands based on your knowledge of the game. I was a little lost as to the humor part of the script, because I didn't really think it was funny.
The dialogue has been well written, but I do feel it could be a bit more show and a little less tell.
The logline of this script doesn't really speak to me, but I am struggling to find a better one for this script. Basically I think the problem is there have been a lot of movies or shorts about the NFL.
As for the writing I say most is very well written. There are some scenes though that could be a bit shorter, like INT. LUXURY BOX - NIGHT - SAME that is more than 5 pages long. Seems long compared to most others.