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The Mob

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Joey, a problematic senior, engages his out of control classroom in a scam.

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Peer Rating: 60%
Industry Rating: N/A
Crime,Drama | 1 Reviews | 12 pages | 3 weeks ago | Draft 1

Summary

The Mob (temporary title?) is a feature-length script I am working on which blends both the high school and gangster genres.

For the time being, I have decided to write a rough draft of a scene I think stands on its own in order to see what people think of this concept and see how I can improve its execution.

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Peer Reviews

Here were my thoughts on your script:

1. Concept - I liked the idea of there being a surprise taking place, with us the audience not knowing if it'll be a good surprise or bad one.

2. Story - I enjoyed the story for what it was here. Mt favorite part was definitely the satisfying ending that caught me by surprise. I think the only thing that could be done to make this story better is to maybe shorten it a bit instead of having one scene dra...

4 days ago | read more...
Cyle Brooks Top Reviewer

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