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The Return

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After a girl is taken, a police officer comes home to help find her. She was on leave because she was taken, too. Now she's hunting the killer that hunted her.

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Thriller | 2 Reviews | 90 pages | 7 months ago | Draft 1

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After a girl is taken, a police officer comes home to help find her. She was on leave because she was taken, too. Now she's hunting the killer that hunted her.

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Concept is not strong enough. It lacks a compelling component.
The first ten pages was completely dull. Nothing was happening.
The protagonist is good but could be better.
The plot is okay but could be better.
The dialogue is good. The script reads well with little or no glitches in terms of formatting and grammatical errors but lacks a solid premise to create an inticing story.
The climax is good but not compelling enough.

4 months ago | read more...
It's a good story, very brooding and real. Although, I had to write the synopsis solely from the point of view of Nora because there are structure, execution and dilemma issues that fall short of the mark and I find myself asking questions about certain aspects of the narrative. For example, would Carter really allow Nora to cut her leave short to come back to work on a case that she is, not just personally emotionally involved with, but personal...

2 months ago | read more...
Damian Rzymski Top Reviewer

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