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1040-EZ Feature

By jeff-lewis

What would happen if the IRS number one agent turns into a modern day Robin Hood?

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Genre: Comedy
No. Reviews: 1 | Length: 117 pages
Published: 4 months ago

Summary

Modern day Robin Hood: When the government miss places millions of dollars it's called misappropriated funds and he who has it gets to keep it. The Sting, Ocean's Eleven, Match Stick Men all rolled into one.

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REVIEWS

This movie has an 80s dramedy feel to it, like Trading Places or Beverly Hills Cop. It’s got a nice light and flippant tone mixed with a crime-caper theme. It moves nicely along and the various story-lines don’t get lost in the story arc. The climax is well thought out and all the right people get their just desserts in the end.

I am not sure I am feeling the giving-back thing as strong as it should be. Its a fine premise if Bill feels the government failed to get the big guys and only get the “small” ones because they didn’t have buyout money. What I would have liked to see beside putting the bad guys away was that Bill got money back to the pension, or pensioners. The side stories of him giving back to people he busted is nice but it has more emotional impact if you reward the audience with a resolution that is mentioned at the beginning of the story. Speaking of that, I think if you had a quick opening scene where Bill is arresting Enlay and Enlay sneers at Bill that he won’t go to jail as he is being led away. Then when you go to the Joel father scene next you have done the balanced exposition to set up Bill’s change of heart scene.

This script is well done and if you continue work on elevating the scenes someone should pick it up!

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