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The Sleepover

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A boy’s friendship is forever changed after a sleepover reveals the truth about his home life.

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Draft #3
Peer Rating: 70%
Industry Rating: N/A
Drama | 2 Reviews | 21 pages | 7 months ago | Draft 3

Summary

A boy’s friendship is forever changed after a sleepover reveals the truth about his home life.

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Peer Reviews

This is a touching story, and it hits home for me personally. The world needs more LGBTQ+ stories, and this one addresses something so important and sad: children with Queer parents often face discrimination from the outside world, even though it may not be their personal orientation. I think the simplicity of this story is what makes it so powerful.

Sometimes, when you're using characters in a specific area (for example, southern/rural), it's...

7 months ago | read more...
Ellynn Mayo Top Reviewer
Here are my thoughts on your script:

1. Concept - I liked the concept that you went with, but there's still some potential to make it stronger.

2. Story - The story was pretty simple, yet kinda charming to read in a sense. Two guys just wanna hang out and have a gaming night until one gets uncomfortable over the fact that he didn't know his friend's mom was a lesbian.

3. Structure - Formatting and structure were pretty good for the most...

6 months ago | read more...
Cyle Brooks Top Reviewer

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