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January Screenplay of the Month Winners

2econd Chance Short
Written By: dragonspirit
Genre: Comedy
Lucky Beggars TV Series
Written By: Marcin Klinkosz
Genre: Drama,Family
Varkazana Ascension Feature
Written By: mike harper
Genre: Horror

Nomineees for Next Month


Feature Film

Aberrant Feature
Written By: mike harper
Genre: Sci-Fi/Fantasy,Romance,Drama
Top Shelf Feature
Written By: Hunter P. Thompson
Genre: Comedy,Romance,Action/Adventure
Alternative Feature
Written By: Cyle Brooks
Genre: Action/Adventure,Horror,Comedy

Television Series

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Short Film

Without Words Short
Written By: Joshua Groenewaldt
Genre: Drama
Bop Short
Written By: Brent Woodroof
Genre: Comedy
The Waiting Room Short
Written By: David Weishaar
Genre: Horror

In the Running

The following scripts are currently eligible for February Screenplay of the Month:

Past Finalists

Title Written By Month
Lucky Beggars TV Series Marcin Klinkosz January - 2020
Varkazana Ascension Feature mike harper January - 2020
2econd Chance Short dragonspirit January - 2020
Ascension Feature jeff-lewis December - 2019
Wasted Life Short A J Lovell December - 2019
A Perfect One For Emma Short D Ray Van November - 2019
Alternative (Rough Draft) Feature Cyle Brooks November - 2019
Dream of Mirrors TV Series Marcin Klinkosz November - 2019
Dream of Mirrors TV Series Marcin Klinkosz October - 2019
The High life after dark Short Christine Locker October - 2019
Black Butterflies Feature Karen Hardinn October - 2019
Sex, Lies, Dinner & Dessert Short Timothy Boissey September - 2019
Westphall TV Series Keith St. Lawrence September - 2019
According to Legend Feature Keith St. Lawrence September - 2019
Unholy Union Short Christine Locker August - 2019
Operation: Anastasia Feature John Aldrich August - 2019
Singular - "Abs0lute Zer0" TV Series SL Eastwood August - 2019
Do It For Her Short Abraam Dawod July - 2019
You're Not All There Is Feature Connor Davey July - 2019
Stalemate TV Series Luke Carroll July - 2019
Gravekeeper TV Series Rindzler June - 2019
Ungifted Feature John Porter June - 2019
The Bench (working title suggestions welcome) Short Caleb Densman June - 2019
The Hobo (Draft 2) TV Series Michael White May - 2019
What We Did That Summer Feature Nick Romantini May - 2019
Man on the Phone Short Rakin Islam May - 2019
The Soft Green Claw Feature Esem Samuels April - 2019
HE IS HERE Short Tedd Luv April - 2019
Chicago Overcoat TV Series Abby LaMarre April - 2019
The Nökken Feature JoAnn Gartin March - 2019
Briarwood TV Series Abby LaMarre March - 2019
Bop Short Brent Woodroof March - 2019
What We Did That Summer Feature Nick Romantini February - 2019
Bop Short Brent Woodroof February - 2019
Lake Of Fire Draftf#4 Feature Anthony Silverwood January - 2019
Westphall TV Series Keith St. Lawrence January - 2019
SUNRISE Short Ronald Mathews January - 2019
Blind Ambition Short Renee Brown December - 2018
Jé Rouge Short Pablo Conseco Hernandez Diaz November - 2018
The Hobo TV Series Michael White November - 2018
Finding Milana Short Kyle Stout November - 2018
Bound by Blood Feature Esem Samuels October - 2018
Inner City Blues Feature Pablo Conseco Hernandez Diaz October - 2018
Internal Affairs TV Series Shawn Decker October - 2018

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Dude! You gave it all away with the title! I thought, "haha, well, if this isn't about gay porn." So the conclusion was severely anti-climatic. Sorry, but the concept isn't original. If its about a creative coming out, then you need to go crazier. If he has a go at his mate, well, this is too easy too. Reading the logline I expected a comedy. Maybe I'm a hard audience, but this was far too normal for me to pop a smile. Go crazy on the weird for the funny. And, slapstick is funny because people try to do something good but fail, mostly in increasing ways (think Adam Sandler). Also, I need a tiny save-the-cat-moment to be able to sympathize with the protagonist. Make me root for him to succeed, because it sooooo cuuuute how he admires and cherishes his roommate form afar, or in other words: set it up. Or was it a joke and we need to see him giggle? Or was this a move and we need to see him place condoms on his nightstand? If I don't know what the main characters's mindset is going into the scene, I don't know the stakes. The entire reading has no conflict to me, other than the friend being clearly bothered, but you haven't shown me, the viewer, why I should care about this. In other words, your act one needs a hook and this is harder in a short, than in a feature, because you only have a few minutes to do so. The script was hard to read, but not because of formatting, but because of the subject. I guess there is no good way to write a script about a person reading out loud a script. It's always kinda strange. The pacing of this piece is weird. There is no real warm-up to the story, and once they finish reading its two lines. To me it reads like 5% act one, 94% act two, and 1% act three. Also the conclusion wasn't clear enough for me: did he try to make a move, or was he just telling his roommate he's gay? Or was this supposed to be a joke? We need a setup, just to know the main character's intentions. About your original logline, I don't get it. The character in the read script seems okay with "lending a hand" the character reading the


Sink TV Series
Reviewed by: David Weishaar
3.25

Wow, this story has the bones of a prime time series. Even though some may see the story as derivative; 'Once Upon A Time', it is this readers opinion that with the marketability and writers unique voice on this story, that there is truly a chance to make this a reality. That being said i have many critiques and hope they only further your story and your personal style. Most of your 'mistakes', were commonly repeated. Showing not a lack of skill but that of mixed writing styles. At some points the script read like a novel, others, a stage play, and then back to screen. EX: Pg.1- '(or had)' giving away information. Pg. 2- 'PULL AWAY'- Camera direction is only used when absolutely necessary or when the writer also plans to direct the film as well. Pg. 4- "It's the last time"- Information. Pg. 4- "The picture clears"- Direction. Pg. 4- "Thank god"- your telling your audience/reader how to feel, show us. Pg. 4- "Young girl again"- lose 'again'. Pg. 7- "This will be"- not necessary. Pg. 17- "watches her with until"- lose 'with'. There are several examples and instead of writing them all down I figured you would get my point. Furthermore, you use an excessive amount of references. Instead I would use your unique voice to describe rather than compare. Lose the Formatting, "Act I, Act II, Act III"- your reader and audience should be able to distinguish these without you telling us. Lose the "Jump Cuts". There are a few points in the script that I felt like the dialogue was out of order. Such as when Florence 'washes' ashore in the cave and she asks why Miri saved her? This early in the story I had the belive that Florence had been a long distance from shore in the wild Atlantic, not close to home. I expected her questions to be more; who are you? where am I?, etc... There are other "industry standards", that I believe need to be remedied but I think too much negative feedback would only hurt this script. Now I think it's time for some positive. The Marketability of this script is off the chain and it has a broad yet clear audience. While reading I often laughed out loud and found even with the "mistakes" that the script was full of joy and it made me smile. Next Page.


Inescapable TV Series
Reviewed by: David Weishaar
3.25

Good Day, I hope this finds you well. Normally I do my reviews in a specific order but this one is different so I shall review in the same order as I read your Script. I hope none of my critiques are too harsh and all will help yourself and your script in the future. BLUR: Starting with reversed domestic violence is a very intriguing hook, well done. Pg. 6- 'shocks'- 'shakes'?- 'shocking'? Pg. 8- Jade is an interesting Character I think you can dig deeper with her, also in my opinion I would not have her use Gemma's name most the time, it's too personal. I'd also shorten her dialogue, it will give your audience more sympathy for Gemma. Pg. 9- 'Why did Gemma give jade the Vodka, after telling her she threw it out?' This could be fleshed out a little more, this readers interpretation is that Gemma knows this is when Jade is happy and will show "Love" which Gemma craves.- (Later you confirm this but I still think it can be fleshed out a bit more.) Pg. 9- "CHRIST KNOWS, GEMM!"-Despite my earlier not, keep this, make it a shout but this was a golden line and will be strengthened if you take out the earlier "Gemma's". Pg. 12- "She's 'our' girl", Is Dad this weak or could you show the first sign of strength and have him say 'my girl'. Also Gemma's outburst here, toward her father, seems unnatural and out of character up till this point. You can have her upset and leave but I would not have her "pissed" at her dad. Let your audience interpret her anger, it helps them connect with the character. Pg. 13- This middle section is the most confusing part of the whole script. They are locked inside the apartment, and instantly freak out and try breaking the window to no avail. Why? Yes it is a stressful spot to be in but they are in no danger, this is not a logical move nor does it call for such a violent scene. This is one spot I think you can completely rewrite because you have the same story without the beating on the window pages. Pg. 14- 'their' Pg. 14- 'mold', Pg. 16- Don't say, "we follow", it's no longer the industry standard. Pg. 17- 'Fetal' I have a few more notes but that's for page two.