Overall the script seems to be a good world builder for the lives of Dom and Paulie. Not only does this story join in realm with other stories we have seen before, but it also gives extra details in between. Details that feel realistic. There is also a building anxiety given how the main character Dom keeps getting reminded about a big liability in his life...... Paulie. The script does a great job of of placing an individual in a world of uncertainty and stress due to loyalty of family. In addition, the script provides a realistic approach to those living in the world that do not feel a shred of responsibility. That lack of responsibility could lead to life changing circumstances for the worse. I feel that this story has great potential to be seen on the big screen. There is a small issue with pacing that I feel can be adjusted and tweaked. Once that is done, the sky is the limit. The script reads like a real life book of the streets.

Harbor View creates tension and intrigue while keeping a clear narrative. The mystery is engaging and the world the writer has created feels authentic to the story. This was an enjoyable read throughout and has potential in developing as a series. It has commercial and creative potential with the topics and themes in the story. The write avoids amateur mistakes such as unclear motivation, and inconsistent tone. The storytelling is focused and it is clear. The only suggestions I can think of are maybe have personal stakes tied to the lighthouse or certain emotional ties to it in a way.

Very strong script overall. Very authentic as the characters talk and feel like real people living in that time period. It has a clear tone and identity of what kind of story this is. Has appeal and would be a great story to put on film. I enjoyed reading. The only suggestions I can see if possibly have character or characters lose something meaningful. Increase the conflict a bit more where maybe survival might not be certain for some.

This script demonstrates a writer with strong cinematic instincts and natural tone control. It reads visually rather than literarily, which immediately sets it apart from most early scripts. The atmosphere is confident, the protagonist is compelling through her emotional opacity, and the violence is handled with notable restraint — all signals of an emerging writer who already understands how film communicates beyond dialogue. Where the script needs growth is in narrative propulsion: for long stretches it observes rather than escalates, causing the dramatic engine to feel quieter than the material promises. Increasing pressure on the protagonist earlier and more consistently would transform the reading experience from “well-written character piece” into a gripping psychological thriller. Dialogue is generally effective but would benefit from trimming whenever it begins to explain theme instead of letting it surface organically. The ending is impactful yet slightly abrupt; a final resonant image or emotional aftershock would give the story greater inevitability. Overall, this is not the work of a beginner finding their voice, but of a writer who already has one — the next step is mastering tension and structural tightening, which could elevate the script significantly.