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Bare Hands, Bare Feet
by Kelly Smith
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by Aly Beaird
83 pages
Ivan vs The Gremlin
by Sean Flanigan
97 pages
Kostya
by scott zimmerman
101 pages

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Six Brides For Dead Pine Creek feature
Genre: Western
Logline: In the aftermath of the American Civil War, a battle-hardened wagon guide escorts six mailorder brides across dangerous frontier territory, where clashes with outlaws, lawmen, and Native nations force both the women and the guide to confront what it truly takes to build a life from nothing.
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We’re No Saints feature
Genre: Crime,Drama
Review Rating:

We’re No Saints is a character-driven crime drama that distinguishes itself through its strong sense of place and authentic portrayal of a tight-knit community. The script effectively captures the atmosphere of Chicago’s Taylor Street neighborhood, using cultural traditions, family dynamics, and religious influences to create a believable and immersive setting. This grounded environment supports the emotional themes of loyalty, morality, and personal responsibility that run throughout the story. The screenplay’s greatest strength lies in its dialogue and character interactions, which feel natural and reflective of long-standing relationships within the community. These conversations help establish a lived-in world where personal history and shared culture influence the choices of the characters. The central character, Dom, provides a solid emotional anchor as the narrative explores his internal struggle between faith, loyalty, and the realities of the environment around him. While the story is engaging, certain sections—particularly in the middle act—could benefit from tighter pacing and clearer escalation of dramatic stakes. Some dialogue-heavy scenes could be slightly trimmed to maintain narrative momentum. Clarifying the emotional weight of a few turning points would also strengthen the overall dramatic arc. Overall, the script demonstrates strong storytelling instincts, effective dialogue, and a clear understanding of character-driven drama. With moderate refinement in pacing and structural emphasis, the screenplay has the potential to become a compelling and engaging crime drama.

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Genre: Thriller
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We’re No Saints feature
Genre: Crime,Drama
Logline: In Chicago’s Little Italy, Dom focuses on starting a fresh life. But, when a bookie looking to collect on his cousin’s debt gets violent, Dom must choose between salvation or sin.
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ALPHA "nature" television
Genre: Sci-Fi/Fantasy
Logline: A top secret genetic engineering research facility created her to be the next generation of super soldier. She's escaped and now they will do anything to get her back.
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Six Brides For Dead Pine Creek feature
Genre: Western
Logline: In the aftermath of the American Civil War, a battle-hardened wagon guide escorts six mailorder brides across dangerous frontier territory, where clashes with outlaws, lawmen, and Native nations force both the women and the guide to confront what it truly takes to build a life from nothing.
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Ivan vs The Gremlin feature
Genre: Sci-Fi/Fantasy
Review Rating:

Overall, Ivan vs The Gremlin is an imaginative and intellectually ambitious screenplay that stands out primarily because of its originality and strong thematic foundation. The script presents a dystopian vision of a society in which fame has become the ultimate currency of value and influence, and where the pursuit of recognition has turned into a psychological trap capable of destroying people who fail to achieve it. Through the character of Ivan Greene, the story explores the emotional consequences of living in a culture that equates personal worth with public attention. This central idea is both timely and thought-provoking, reflecting many anxieties surrounding modern social media culture, influencer economies, and the growing pressure for visibility and validation in contemporary society. The screenplay also demonstrates a confident creative voice, blending satire, absurdist humor, and philosophical reflection in a way that gives the world of the story a distinctive tone. One of the screenplay’s greatest strengths is its conceptual boldness. The idea that ambition itself can become a form of illness—manifesting in violent “crashes” when people realize their dreams will never be fulfilled—creates a powerful metaphor that resonates throughout the narrative. The script consistently uses surreal or exaggerated situations to highlight this concept, often presenting the world of media and entertainment as a strange ecosystem where attention is manipulated and distributed like a controlled resource. This thematic ambition, combined with the unusual personality of the protagonist, gives the screenplay a unique identity that separates it from more conventional genre stories. At the same time, the execution of the story is somewhat uneven. While the opening of the screenplay establishes the world and its central ideas effectively, the middle portion becomes episodic and occasionally loses focus on the protagonist’s primary objective of finding the Gremlin. Many of the sequences in this section are creative and entertaining in their own right, but they sometimes feel more like satirical sketches exploring different aspects of the world rather than steps in a tightly connected narrative progression. As a result, the pacing slows in places and the dramatic tension fluctuates before the story regains its direction near the final act. Tightening and consolidating some of these sequences would likely strengthen the overall structure and give the narrative a clearer sense of momentum. The characters also contribute strongly to the screenplay’s identity. Ivan is a memorable and unconventional protagonist whose awkwardness and insecurity create both humor and emotional vulnerability. His journey from desperate seeker of recognition to someone who ultimately rejects the system of fame provides a meaningful thematic arc. The character of Corey Lemon serves as an effective counterpart to Ivan, embodying the seductive but ultimately empty promise of celebrity power. Supporting characters often function more as satirical archetypes than deeply developed individuals, but they serve the purpose of reinforcing the screenplay’s critique of media culture and social hierarchies. The dialogue further supports the screenplay’s tone by combining humor, philosophical commentary, and character-driven awkwardness. Conversations frequently explore ideas about identity, fame, and ambition, giving the script an intellectual quality that complements its satirical elements. While some passages become somewhat explanatory or verbose, the dialogue generally helps establish a consistent voice and reinforces the distinctive personality of the story. In conclusion, Ivan vs The Gremlin is a screenplay with a strong creative vision and an unusually original concept. Its satire of fame and the attention economy is sharp, imaginative, and often very funny, and the philosophical undertones give the story a depth that extends beyond simple comedy. Although the narrative structure could benefit from tighter pacing and a clearer progression through the middle act, the screenplay’s inventive world-building, distinctive protagonist, and thematic ambition make it a compelling and memorable piece of writing. With refinement to strengthen its structural focus, the script has the potential to become a very distinctive and thought-provoking film.

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Ivan vs The Gremlin feature
Genre: Sci-Fi/Fantasy
Logline: In a world obsessed with fame and content, a celebrity's ghost tasks Ivan, a wannabe influencer, with murdering The Gremlin, a mysterious creature bent on gatekeeping fame from normal people.
Grayson Hancock uploaded a script.
1 week ago
The Cruz Chronicles television
Genre: Family,Comedy
Logline: Leo Cruz is about to move on to high school. He wants to go down as the greatest student to ever attend his middle school. He goes on wacky adventure getting into trouble by doing pranks and personal troubles.
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2 weeks ago
Ashes Before the Throne feature
Genre: Sci-Fi/Fantasy,Drama
Logline: When a cynical demon who stood neutral during the War in Heaven begins to feel empathy for his human victims, he must defy the hierarchies of Hell and survive a series of celestial trials to see if God’s mercy can reach even the damned.
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Kostya feature
Genre: History,Thriller,Drama
Logline: After surviving genocide, extreme Nazi forced labor, and Allied bombings, a Ukrainian teenager must sacrifice his first love and risk his life to escape Stalin's forced labor, outwit a Soviet General, and return to his family. Inspired by a true story.
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Ivan vs The Gremlin feature
Genre: Sci-Fi/Fantasy
Logline: In a world obsessed with fame and content, a celebrity's ghost tasks Ivan, a wannabe influencer, with murdering The Gremlin, a mysterious creature bent on gatekeeping fame from normal people.
Davjaun Beamon uploaded a script.
2 weeks ago
Stroke-Aerobics feature
Genre: Comedy,Drama
Logline: A strait-laced loan officer convinced his wife is cheating enrolls in a men's sex class to save his marriage—only to discover the real problem was never in the bedroom.
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