This is a very short review, because there isn't much to complain or change. What could you change? You could expand a little. Maybe my few notes will help you think of something. My notes would be: 1) Why would this guy go to a pop music audition? 2) How did he get backstage after he went home? Security is always tight at venues. 3) Where was his amp when he was playing guitar? It's an electric guitar. So, it needs an amp. I don't watch these shows. But, aren't they usually singing to backing tracks or a band that isn't on stage? He'd have to get back into the auditorium, hope there's an amp to plug into, and then do his stuff. This isn't so much a note, as a thought. I mostly write full length micro-budget scripts. I have written some scripts that would need a true budget. But, if I ever got off my ass and tried to sell a script, I might be able to. My short scripts, I could shoot myself. I always plan to, and then get lazy. What do you plan on doing with this? This would need a budget, just for blowing people up at the end. It's good exercise. But, full length with solid structure could be much more helpful. Best of Luck. This was enjoyable. It was cute.

All in all, a great idea that needs to be written in a more serious tone and manner. Exploration of grief by the main character should be at the center of it. Slowly building tension with the murder and supernatural elements should take place on every page. Complexity should pour over every character. I would recommend you trim down all unnecessary accessory elements, focus on Jeanie's struggle with the death of her mother. Start by giving them a more nuanced relationship, a real peace to be made. Send of Marilyn in a tension-packed sequence that indicates something about the mystery of her death. Plunge Jeanie in the proper depths of the emotional trauma this would ensue. Slap her mental stability with subtle indications of paranormal presence. Build up her trust on the ghost of her mother and solve the case. Truly solve the case without unnecessary twists that damage the plot and characters.

Overall, I thought this was a fun read. It was for sure a very unique concept for a script that I've never seen or heard before. Although I would recommend re-reading through it and breaking up tedious dialogue lines with action lines or just removing them altogether. I would also make this short even shorter or extend it to a feature length. A great starts to a script though, so keep up the good work and hopefully my feedback will be helpful for your future revisions!