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The Cabin on Walker Lane
by Clay von Carlowitz
118 pages
Top Shelf
by Hunter P. Thompson
107 pages
Character Actor
by Clay von Carlowitz
108 pages
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by Timothy McClelland
95 pages
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Rapture of Elle Divine - Time to Pray E$ television
Genre: Drama,Action/Adventure
Logline: Archangels intercede to save Treasury Agent Casey’s life as the Black Angel Syndicate are on the Agent’s and Ghost Writer’s inquiry into the financial holdings. Elle Divine and the disciples leverage net apps to proselytize their arrival through music and a resurrection.
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Flash Flood short
Genre: Drama,Thriller,Western
Logline: A flash flood wipes out a farmer. He tries to get his money back from the rancher who sold him the land, claiming fraud. When the rancher refuses, he takes justice into his own hands.
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Flash Flood short
Genre: Drama,Thriller,Western
Logline: A flash flood wipes out a farmer. He tries to get his money back from the rancher who sold him the land, claiming fraud. When the rancher refuses, he takes justice into his own hands.
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The Comet short
Genre: Drama
Logline: Ben comes to the Fast Lane bowling alley everyday after school, partly because he idolizes amateur bowler, Jenny "The Comet" Cornell, and partly to escape some dark past.
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Flash Flood short
Genre: Drama,Thriller,Western
Logline: A flash flood wipes out a farmer. He tries to get his money back from the rancher who sold him the land, claiming fraud. When the rancher refuses, he takes justice into his own hands.
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Asteroid feature
Genre: Sci-Fi/Fantasy
Logline: A young woman hopes to use a treasure map to bail out her failing spaceport. She joins a crew of space pirates on a voyage to a distant asteroid, encounters danger and unexpected romance from a young scoundrel, who reforms and helps her reach her goal. “Treasure Island” in space.
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Asteroid feature
Genre: Sci-Fi/Fantasy
Logline: A young woman hopes to use a treasure map to bail out her failing spaceport. She joins a crew of space pirates on a voyage to a distant asteroid, encounters danger and unexpected romance from a young scoundrel, who reforms and helps her reach her goal. “Treasure Island” in space.
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Alex Stone uploaded a script.
2 days ago
Legacy short
Genre: Sci-Fi/Fantasy,Animation,Family
Logline: A montage following 3 generations of astronauts over the history of space travel and the legacy each father has on the next generation.
Timothy McClelland uploaded a script.
2 days ago
Pretty Ugly feature
Genre: Romance,Comedy,Drama
Logline: Danny is a small town loner hiding away from the world and Aviva is an up and coming actress who is growing tired of her life being on display so when circumstances bring them together for a day of misadventures in Danny's town, they may just find that they're not so different after all.
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The Hostel television
Genre: Comedy
Logline: A mockumentary following the party reps in a hostel as they plan nights out, host events and try to form a somewhat functioning team in the process.
Advait Dantuluri completed a review for
2 days ago
Land of Fear feature
Genre: Horror,Thriller,Sci-Fi/Fantasy
Review Rating:

The premise of the story is very intriguing, and its execution really hits the mark. When everyone starts to get infected, it creates a lot of tension in the story, and also a feeling of fear when they encounter the rabids. There is a large amount of intense moments and surprising twists that leave the reader shocked. However, the best aspect of the story is the take on human nature, showing how mean-spirited and unethical everyone is when dealing with the pandemic. It is also interesting to see how Eve deals with losing the people she cares about, and how she realizes how faulty she and the other people in the story are. While the story is serious, there is multiple times the script made me laugh, like the line on how to end the pandemic. I also like the twist ending, where instead of solving the pandemic, everyone ends up dying and humanity has to start all over again with humanoids. It shows how caring people could be, especially with the relationship with Clark and Eve. If there were some problems with the screenplay, it has to be the beginning, which feels very boring and generic. I think to make it more engaging, you should put the scene that introduces the white rat as the first scene in the movie. This will get the audience hooked into watching the rest of the movie. Also, I'm not sure including real-life political figures like President Trump and Kim Jong-un is a good idea, so you should replace them with fictional characters.

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The Comet short
Genre: Drama
Logline: Ben comes to the Fast Lane bowling alley everyday after school, partly because he idolizes amateur bowler, Jenny "The Comet" Cornell, and partly to escape some dark past.
Kishan Chotalia completed a review for
2 days ago
The Comet short
Genre: Drama
Review Rating:

the points I make later on builds on this idea). This certainly is challenging and I don't envy the task you have! So the story/structure follows a time old tradition of seeing the characters in the status quo, then a problem is introduced (act one). The character tries to solve the problem (act two). The character overcomes the problem and adjusts to the new normal (act three). In that sense, this story ticks all the boxes. It's just for me it needs something more because it is so short. It needs a twist, something readers won't see coming. Now this is of course easier said than done. But, off the top of my head, maybe you could bring the ending to the start, so we see Ben in his suit and he says that "someone's" been charged. Then we see a flashback to him, practising his bowling, dreading to go home (for some reason, we don't know why). We can then see a flashback of his childhood, which was traumatic and stressful. Then he comes back sporting a bloody eye and he alludes to a case of domestic violence. We then return to present and reveal that "The Comet" is actually his dad (so the photograph is of a man, not a woman) and his mother was arrested for domestic violence. The twist here being that as the audience we were expecting it to be a male figure. That's just off the top of my head and I'm sure you'll be able to come up with something better! Character Development/Dialogue So every word, every action has to count - because you're playing with so little. So everything has to be dialled up a notch. If Sean is the "boisterous, loud" character, what's the most entertaining way he could introduce himself? It might not be "Is he already here". Maybe it's a joke? Maybe it's something that creates intrigue and alludes to Ben - like "$5 says I know exactly where Ben is in the world right now". Beth "You've got to be stupid to take that bet" Ben "Why do you think I'm asking you?" That way we're showing Ben's cheeky, but we're also wondering how/why do they know this Ben character is definitely going to be here, a bowling alley of all places! So this is something that could be worked on. Overall with the dialogue you keep to the golden rule of short snappy sentences, and no character saying more than 3 sentences at a time (I've taken this from Sitcoms, and if anything it would be even stricter here!). But again, the main way I'd improve the dialogue (and the characters) is really trying to make sure each thing they say, they're saying it in the most "Beth/Sean/Ben" way possible! Another example would be in the scene where Beth and Sean are waiting. I think you did a good job of following her character (i.e. she was angry with him but sympathetic at the same time). What's the most "Beth" behaviour here? I imagine her nervously fidgeting with something, Sean getting annoyed at this. Then Sean would tell her to stop worrying and to calm down, nothing's probably happened to him anyway (he says this because he encouraged Ben to fight and he's actually worried for him). In terms of grammar/formatting, there's also some missing punctuation and misspellings/incorrect capitalisations dotted throughout that'll need correcting (an example in this scene - it'll be two instead of two, there's a capital I on if that isn't needed, "He immediately collapses" and "Beth then rushes over" should be on one line.

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2 days ago
Land of Fear feature
Genre: Horror,Thriller,Sci-Fi/Fantasy
Logline: An AI expert must use her lifetime's work to find a cure for a rabies outbreak, that threatens to push humanity to the edge of extinction. But can she save humanity from it's greatest threat - itself?
Kishan Chotalia just claimed a review for a script.
2 days ago
The Comet short
Genre: Drama
Logline: Ben comes to the Fast Lane bowling alley everyday after school, partly because he idolizes amateur bowler, Jenny "The Comet" Cornell, and partly to escape some dark past.

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